tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-27509650.post8197634309437319563..comments2023-08-24T07:42:44.371-07:00Comments on The Bored Business: Anonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11572246949940835923noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-27509650.post-35270150110306840412009-05-19T19:23:57.771-07:002009-05-19T19:23:57.771-07:00A good story. Your voice is really strong and you...A good story. Your voice is really strong and your character has authority. I would only suggest some conflict between the narrator and the girl. Tina? Lisa?<br /><br />Good stuff though dylan. I think you've got a great talent with words.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com